Passage to improve homework week 9

The sun was setting. I walked towards the hill. My feet were sore. My red scarf was wrapped around my neck. The wind was blowing. My scarf was moving. In the distance I saw a figure. It moved slowly. Its outline was blurred. I got closer and could see it was a man. The sky was getting darker. The shadow was getting larger. My footprints left shapes in the sand. I screwed up my eyes to make out the figure. It was …..

 

Makes changes to the start of this story, ensure you also let me know who the figure is. Think about what makes a Level 3 writer and what you’ll need to include.